Countless dreamers have looked to the sky, their thoughts fixed on flying. The Wright brothers’ powered flight initiated men into a realization of that dream. I, too, found myself with a very personal and enthusiastic dream of flying as a boy. As a participant in a model plane tournament in elementary school, I found the joy of making a model plane and tinkering with it to find the perfect form. This boyhood pastime fostered my decision to major in aeronautical and mechanical engineering in one of the best engineering schools in Korea, Hankuk Aviation University.
点评：第一段通过描述作者小时候制作飞机模型和参加比赛的经历，体现了他小时候的梦想，和兴趣的产生。并引用怀特兄弟说明了自己决心的坚定。从而引出了自己今后的目标，和追求目标考上航空机械工程学院的经历。这个开篇虽然比较大众，但是表达出了自己的兴趣和目标，并起到了引出下文的作用。
There I embraced numerous opportunities, encountering real aircraft and delving into introductory flight theory. From basic mechanics of aircraft to simple airplane design, the more I learned about my major, the more I wanted to learn. A natural extension of this burning curiosity remains to enter your renowned graduate program in the Department of Aerospace Engineering.
点评：第二段是一个过渡段，简单介绍了在航空学院可以接触到的东西，这些专业的知识使自己的兴趣更加浓烈，促使自己更加全身心投入到这个领域的学习。很好的起到承上启下的作用。
My preparation for your program has been expansive and thorough. First, I have a solid background in aeronautical and mechanical engineering. Additionally, during my undergraduate years, I joined a club called Information Process Research (IPR) focused on computer programming. Our projects dealt with visual C++, AutoCAD, and other software tools. My work outside the classroom, in job placements through Hankuk Aviation University, granted me excellent opportunities for real-world experience. This led to my associate membership of the Korea Aeronautical Engineers’ Association.
点评：这段简单描述了自己在本科期间参与的一个项目，介绍了自己专业的背景。通过这个项目的介绍，反映出了作者本科期间参与的活动，证明了他由于兴趣，开始研究和探索的过程，和为了追求目标所做的努力，同时也反映出了专业能力和背景。
While exploring the possibility of graduate-level work, I discovered that my interests are perfectly matched with your program. My interest in flight mechanics and control, especially, was piqued during my flight control and automatic control systems class. The aspects of the control system fascinated me and made me long to supervise a large project in this field one day. Although I realize my current limitations, my whole-hearted enthusiasm, combined with guidance from your exceptional faculty, will carry me through the rigors of studying and forge me into an expert control systems engineer after the two year M.S. coursework and the subsequent Ph.D. courses.
点评：本段写通过作者不断学习，确立了自己今后的学习方向和目标，并且把自己的兴趣很好的与申请学校相结合，同时反映了自己本学校在这方面的劣势。反映出自己迫切想要到对方学校学习的渴望。
Upon graduation from your school, I plan to work as a practical engineer in a large manufacturing company or as a researcher at an institute. Participating in the development of advanced airplanes, space shuttles, and satellites would fulfill my aspirations. In the long term, I would like to become a professor in order to share my knowledge and experience and instruct the next generation of aeronautical engineers.
点评：最后一段作者描写了自己从这个学校毕业后，可以取得的成绩和职业规划。使学校可以看出学校的教育可以给他提供的帮助。同时反映出了作者明确的学习目标，和动机。
整体点评
大纲：本文分成四大部分
第一部分描写作者小时候的梦想和追求梦想的过程，在叙述经历中，体现出了自己的兴趣产生和确定自己航空事业的目标。
第二部分描写作者进入航空航天大学学习专业知识的经历，通过专业学校的学习和研究项目的实践，使自己确立的今后的学习方向和职业发展道路。
第三部分，作者描写找到了自己今后打算学习的方向，但是自己学校在本领域的教学研究并不强，而对方学校在这方面是很有优势的，反映出自己迫切想要去那里学习的渴望。
第四部分，作者大胆展现了自己通过在那里学习后，可以在职业上的发展和目标，更加证明了学校可以给作者的帮助。
主题内容：
文章以时间为线索，以一个孩子童年的梦想为主线，描写了作者从小制作模拟飞机，到长大后学习航空方面知识的经历，展现了作者小时候在模拟飞机上的成功对自己今后学习和职业发展的影响。以及进入专业学校通过不断的学习积累，取得的良好成绩的经过，对航空事业和自我认识及理想的追求。